Im sorry but there is just too much wrong with this one
i mean E for Effort and all but the words passed way too fast
the animation were not really that fluid and that shouldnt be all too hard to do considering you have all the finished sprites to animate with.
Secondly The music looped over eachother which made it unbearable to listen too.
And thirdly the animation you did draw yourself was not putten that much effort into :/
im sorry i don't mean to be too harsh and i don't hope you see me coming off ass aggresive because im not trying to :) but it was just not very good :/
with a little practise and some tests in flash then maybe you can come up with something a little more fluid and interesting :) cheers!